OK, for your benefit, Jon, I'll go off the deep end. I did listen to the songs and I read the reviews. It's not that this review was harshest or meanest or thisest or thatest. Here are the things that together conspired to inspire me to review the review.Generic wrote:Roymond, why are you singling out this one review of this one song? This is not the harshest nor the unfairest review on Songfight recently. In fact, it's not even the harshest nor unfairest in this fight. In fact, it's not even the harshest nor unfairest review of this song in this fight. Plus, if you listen to the song or read the other reviewers, you'll see that lalabrookie's opinion isn't really off the reservation on this one - she even took the time to point out specific things about the song that rubbed her the wrong way. What more do you want in a review?
- You’re a 15 year old white boy, right? Correct me if I’m wrong.
The overwhelming majority here were once 15 year old white kids that wanted to try out the music thing. So, sue him if he gives it a shot. We all know no one ever gets better by trying, anyway.
- This “song” is an example of the crappy influence of today’s “music” industry and all of the problems that lie therein.
'scuse me? The Man Himself was involved in this crime? This "song" is a jumping off point for somebody that just might want to learn about music. It's his first entry. Geez, indeed.
- And if you really feel that you have some talent in there somewhere ...bla bla hedging filler... why don’t you go for something unique rather than doing what everyone else is doing?
Yes. Every original thinker that ever created unique art started out with one defining thought: "I should really try to be unique." Because we all know that Picasso couldn't draw worth shit. Philip Glass didn't study with Persichetti. And lord knows George Martin never produced jazz, classical and comedy before he got the Beatles thrown at him.
- Think about it.
Well, will ya punk? Here's the meat of the matter: give up. *Inspired*
Yes, there were a couple helpful comments that cement the commentary:
- Backing synth is really repetitive and annoying.
No, actually only that one item.
Look, I don't know lalabrookie. I don't know J SHEESY. So forgive me if I'm out of line for pointing out that constructive criticism usually doesn't include rugs being pulled out from underfoot (until they earn such favoritism). The song sucks. It really sucks. So what? Song Fight can often resemble a songwriting community that helps people figure shit out. It's not Song Love, mind you (your song really does suck, J Sheesy).
"So, where are your reviews, Mr Hot Under the Collar” you ask?
J Cheesy - Don’t sing about the process (“one take”). It comes off cheap out of the gate. Cut this intro way down. Kick right in...then get out fast because there’s not a lot of patience for static hip hop that doesn’t really go anywhere. Leave them wanting more. Freestyle is cool, when you can freestyle ideas and actually say something. Sort of like how songwriters write lyrics to say something. Even freestyle climbers have a goal to get to the top (don't try this at home, kids). And don’t look for special treatment “cause I freestyle, yo.” I think Charles hit it when he said, in your intro thread, “Be amazing and then let us tell you you're the greatest.” This might take time, however.
lalabrookie - Stevie Nicks much? No, I’m just kidding! Your harmonies are really sweet, and the guitar tone is the right kind of “full”. But the repetitive changes (repetitive changes?) get tired after a couple dozen verses...this really needs a bridge to break out of the drone zone. Cut the harmonies on that sort-of-a-bridge-but-not-really-since-it-sound-exactly-like-the-verse and sing in unison, maybe. Melodic variation is your friend. And these lyrics surely could have explored your recent utilities-related challenges in a deeper way, though the “you better be a gas” jib got a chuckle. I'm over this situation, but look forward to more.
